Comic for Monday, July 30th, 2018
So the current plan is half-rations for the week, when it comes to comics. Once again, I am not that convinced it saves me that much time, as I tend to just compact things a little bit, but it probably saves some time.
I anticipate work is not quite done its shit show yet, as they decided to refresh the broken environments over the weekend instead of let me finish fixing them, which will do absolutely nothing besides delay getting the fix deployed and tested. I am currently a little salty about it.
Looking at this page in retrospect, I assure you no copy-paste was used, though I can see that maybe I should have, haha. Part of the time trimmed clearly went into panel composition 😉
Though it may seem like the Consul has become the main character of the comic… she’s is still more of a character to her own story, and is just sort of passing through the lime light, though I expect that just like several other characters we have seen, it will be more of a zig-zag through the lime light showing up here and there. I think she’s showing up a lot currently because Tyler is currently not the most involved point of view in things, and that leaves a pretty large narrative gap for someone to fill, as he’s shown up almost as much as anyone.
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I would go with “the deployed units consist of a single operator within a walking tank containing several….”
“Confidential” as in he doesn’t yet know where the designer signed them but can probably tell you how much damage they’ll do with at least 80-85% accuracy.
Panel 6, Yoav’s first speech bubble, it’s should be its, as you don’t mean “… to verify it is information”. They know it is information, they just haven’t verified that M.Y.M.’s information is good.
I only noticed this writing up the transcript for the page.
A very nice page. I like the way this conversation is going. But…
M.Y.M.: “The deployed units are large single operator units with several I.D.S. standard armor-grade boost engines.”
It is redundant to use the word “units” twice in the same sentence in order to describe them. The extra “units” does not add anything to the sentence. I think it would make more sense and sound better to state it like so:
M.Y.M.: “The deployed units are large, single-operator humanoid walking tanks with several I.D.S. standard, armor-grade boost engines.”
Alternatively, he might describe them as ‘bipedal locomotion mobile artillery”, “bipedal walking tanks”, “mechanized tanks”, “mechs” or similar.
Or better yet, “they are,” given the previous speech bubble.
I would agree that
“They are large single operator units with several I.D.S. standard armor-grade boost engines.”
seems to flow more naturally. Mium’s speech not always flowing naturally is part of his character description, though normally it’s more about using words differently than other people, or replying with what most people would consider complete non-sequiturs.
Yes, Mium’s speech is stilted sometimes, but this doesn’t feel like the right *kind* of stilted. At least, to me, but I can’t say exactly what makes me feel like that. (Probably that Mium wouldn’t say the same thing twice unless explicitly asked [with “explicitly” interpreted broadly], because that would be redundant, and redundancy – in this sense – doesn’t feel like Mium’s style.)
I didn’t even notice it was”half”. I just thought woohoo! Comic!
This is how you get Mium to like you. She never demanded or assumed. She *asked* and stated it as a favor. This is what Arron just can’t wrap his head around: treating Mium like a tool and nothing more is a good way to get on his bad side (Annoying Miko doesn’t help his case either). He doesn’t seem to mind the way Peter treats him, probably because Peter treats everyone like that.
Also, while peter does ask a lot and have certain more advanced permissions to create and modify rules, he listens too. Afterall, you wouldn’t admit you were wrong to a computer (remember the “literally no one would find your risk reduction plac acceptable”, comment).
Actually, I think Peter’s more inclined to request things from Mium and tell other people he needs them. I mean, yes, he tells Mium he needs things, too. But it feels like there’s more variety in how he tells Mium than other people.
Personally, I see this page as a win for both the Consul getting Mium to like her and for Mium getting the Consul to like him – and infiltrating the Malsan government even more. I mean, he now has a *request* from the *Consul* to deliver information to the Malsan military as if it’s Bureau information. He may not have technically needed that request to do that, but now he has an audio recording (or is it a holo recording?) of the Consul granting him the authority.
I also note that she did not ask M.Y.M. directly to get Peter, despite the fact that he could do so quickest. I think she’s cognizant of the need to be careful about how many favors she asks of him.
I did like seeing that everybody on this page seemed to understand their roles well: The leader leading, the advisor advising, and everyone else only speaking as spoken to due to it being a military situation.
Panel 3: “A several”
Fixed, thanks 🙂