Comic for Thursday, October 13th
I have a suspicion I have horribly offended the rules of grammar in the second bubble of the second panel. I dunno. It makes sense to me. Of course, that’s usually a sure sign that it is very wrong.
Do I think I have overplayed the whole “hear one side of the conversation”? Probably. Am I going to stop? Probably not. Well. This’ll be the last time for- oh wait. Nope. Yeah. Sorry about that it will totally happen again. Originally I planned to show both sides of the conversation for almost all of these, but that means I have either to jump-cut across more of the conversations or spend more pages on it, and I am trying to bring the passage of stuff per page slightly higher than it was last chapter. Adapting the story as I think of it to a comic can be tricky, but there is the danger of getting too bogged down in what every character is doing all the time and skipping so much it starts to look like it’s losing threads.
Speaking of which I’m getting close to a scene that I’ve really wanted to write for a long time around the middle of this chapter.
The art is a little hit or miss on this page, but in my defense I have no idea why the artist thought he should draw things like a top down shot of people. I don’t think I’ve ever really even tried to draw that. Hell if I know what people look like from the top down. This artist man, this artist. 😐
I hope no one missed the Ballgown Magnolia vote incentive – that one wasn’t bad (even if I am not 100% confident I know what a ballgown is). Currently up is (or up very shortly if you’re on the ball reading this…) is the next vote incentive, Naomi as Supergirl (costume) and Kally as Raven (costume), both from DC comics. Feel free to continue tossing suggestions in the ring, and I’ll put links up to all of them on Halloween, and they are all uploaded on the Patreon under the free stuff if you missed any.
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I feel the need to correct her to Moonwalking Bear.
Though that may just be an episode of Leverage now bouncing around in my memory. (The bear’s not going to eat me, is it?)
And of course he knows what you’re saying right now! Just because that is all he says doesn’t mean he doesn’t understand what you’re saying. (That said, referring to Mium as Peter’s “minion” for some reason tickles me.)
Well, I guess pretty much any [verbing] bear would work here…. 😉 Most any [verbing] [animal] would work, if it was Miko it’d have to be like “dancing dolphin” or “moonwalking moose”, but Kally is less prone to alliteration in her [verbing animals] than Miko.
For some reason the Moonwalking Bear reference feels appropriate, too, since Peter probably would probably be willing to pull that trick out of boredom. (Distract so much as so those you’re distracting don’t notice said moonwalking bear.)
*notices a line in the rant*
A scene you’ve been wanting to write?! The rest of this has been absurdly awesome, and you’re probably already owed internets for every third or so page in the chapter. What the hell should we expect for the scene that you’ve been waiting for?!
Well, she has accurately summarized Mium.
I do not think they have to worry about the rest of the squad. Pretty sure they have their hands full already. Their boss already fared rather poorly against Mium-light.
I think it is interesting that Mium is drinking coffee. Is it just for appearances or does it actually help him in any way?
I think is the first time we’ve seen Mium eat/drink something, but Naomi referenced him eating things previously. He can/does, he is just… less… fussy… than Ila.
Lies! Ila knows you lie badly, he eats nutritious crap lacking vital fats, sugars and salt. He is the anti-taste.
That’s “Yummy Food” Kali not just food. Also Mium might know what Monster Hunters are the little bundle of charm is unlikely to care.
“I sort compromise these days by drawing things I know will probably not turn out flawless under the banner of broadening my horizons, but I’m just assuming that’s how it works – I’m certainly no artist ”
I have to disagree, you draw and write and share with the public ergo as they say in latium you are an artist.
Yeah, I keep telling him that…..
PastUtopia just likes to complain ^^
Shoo, you. No need to give away all my secrets.
Haha, never! ^^ Selling PastUtopia secrets, PST.
<3
Actually, the second panel, second speech bubble works. It would be a little smoother to say, “is both”, but like I said, it works this way, too. 🙂
This page sets a record for the largest number of images of Kally without a scowl on her face–even when Peter’s name is mentioned.. 🙂
I’m pretty sure that Myum speaks quite a few languages–we know he’s fluent in snark. ^^
Speaking of snark, did anyone else do the math in Panel 2. ^^
I think that is what Kally is getting at in the last line, her math skills may be a little lacking though if she thinks Mium “might be” making fun of her…
I am pretty confident Mium not only speaks Central, but the very first time he showed up it was implied he could hear radio/cell conversations from a building away, so I imagine he can hear the side of the conversation we cannot.
😉
in the 3rd panel it should be “if you’re normal locals, I am a DANCING BEAR.” but it’s still funny.
Haha damnit! Originally it was “if you normal locals, I am dancing bear”. I realized I forgot an “a” and edited it, but apparently missed the “you” to “you’re”. So close. 😀 The original might have worked if for a cave person, but probably not Kally 😉
Thanks! Fixed. I hope.
yup, you fixed it.
Actually, I’d call your from-above shot pretty on-point. Only criticism there is that Kally’s arm seems to be in a more relaxed position than I’d be expecting. Aside from that, I’d say your perspective is a little strong in panels 1 and 5, assuming that means what I think it means – I’m certainly no artist.
These are definitely the sort of shots I should have used a reference of something for. But that would be the smart thing to do. I sort of just draw and after I am done think “damn, I should have used a reference for that”.
In an ideal world I would make the page in several passes, but typically I just sketch with poses and emote faces -> do the detail of the faces and clothes in a second sketch -> final art. The concept of set building and thumb-nailing are quite lacking. These are the things I always tell myself I will work on, but I enjoy drawing characters at lot more than backgrounds / sets.
I sort compromise these days by drawing things I know will probably not turn out flawless under the banner of broadening my horizons, but I’m just assuming that’s how it works – I’m certainly no artist 😛