The Far Side of Utopia

Discussion (3) ¬

1. 
   Code Monkey

   January 26, 2018, 7:22 pm | # | Reply

   1st panel, 2nd bubble: there doesn’t need to be a comma prior to ‘that,’ as it’s only the subsequent phrase that’s a temporary divergence from the main point, and that sentence already has an overabundance of commas… 😉

   Also, I agree with the very old previous comment that the second panel’s sentence should end with a question mark.

   I would recommend a semicolon in place of the comma in the 3rd sentence of panel 3 and save that comma for just prior to the ‘too’, but it’s not a big deal.

   The 2nd and 3rd sentences from panel 4 appear to be two halves of the same sentence…or maybe that’s a tiny comma I’m mistaking for a period..?

   (I won’t be offended if you ignore any/all of my recommendations; I just saw that people had previously commented on such things and I figured, as a new set of eyes on some very old pages, that perhaps my suggestions could be beneficial…)

   • 
     PastUtopia

     January 28, 2018, 2:38 am | # | Reply

     Fixed, thanks. I don’t really ignore the comments on the old pages, but these older pages are harder to fix, so sometimes takes me a bit to get around to them (and I forget)… which is pretty close to ignoring it sometimes, I guess 🙂 , But I don’t mean to 😉
2. 
   Galadan

   August 10, 2015, 11:38 am | # | Reply

   In frame two, again use a question mark. 🙂